基础题
基础题:
题目:请根据五步写作法,为作文题目 "My Favorite Season" 完成前两步(审题与列纲)。
解答过程::
1.
Step 1 审题:
- 关键词:Favorite(最喜欢的,需表达情感)、Season(季节,需限定范围)。
- 隐含要求:需说明“为什么”喜欢。
2.
Step 2 列纲:
- 开头:直接点明最喜欢的季节是 Spring。
- 中间:
- 点1:天气温暖(It is warm and sunny.)
- 点2:花开草绿(Flowers bloom and grass turns green.)
- 点3:适合户外活动(I can fly kites with friends.)
- 结尾:总结感受(I love spring because it is beautiful and lively.)
变式题:
题目:学生小明写了以下草稿,请指出他在五步法中缺失了哪一步,并给出修改建议。
*草稿*:I like summer. It is hot. I eat ice cream. I go swimming. Summer is good.
解答过程::
1.
诊断:
- 审题:OK(知道写夏天)。
- 列纲:缺失。句子之间是碎片化的罗列,没有逻辑主线(如:按时间顺序?按活动分类?)。
- 起草:句子过于简单,缺乏连接词(对应前置知识点 3.1 主句+连接词+陈述句 未充分运用)。
- 修改:缺失。没有检查时态一致性和逻辑连贯性。
2.
修改建议:
- 补全
Step 2 列纲:确定逻辑线为“天气 -> 食物 -> 活动 -> 感受”。
- 补全
Step 4 修改:
- 加入连接词:First, it is hot. Then, I eat ice cream. Also, I go swimming.
- 丰富细节:It is very hot in summer. I like eating ice cream because it is cool. I often go swimming with my father.
- 最终定稿:I like summer best. It is very hot. First, I eat ice cream. Then, I go swimming with my father. I think summer is wonderful.